By Andy Hamilton
The crosshairs track from the
windscreen of one car to the next. Silence. She sits in the centre of a large
double bed, folding strips of paper into smaller and smaller shapes. He is
crouched behind the open window, watching everything that moves.
“Daddy? Daddy!”
“Daddy? Daddy!”
“Yes
sweetie?”
“Look,”
she says as she lifts a triangular piece of red paper high into the air. “I’ve
made a party dress. Just like one of Mommy’s.”
“Okay,”
he says, his eyes still fixed on the window. “That’s nice.”
From the second story window he can see everything that approaches the house from the road. He can see a truck or large van from a mile away or more. He can see the gate, and behind it apple saplings, long ago strangled by hungry weeds. He can see the tiny stone well, were they had once tied twine to willow branches and pretended to fish. He can see the two black cars that sit in the driveway.
“Daddy?”
“Yes?”
“Are
we like cowboys?”
“Cowboys?
What do you mean cowboys?”
“Like
on the telly. Are we like those cowboys?”
“Do
you mean, are we the good guys?”
"Ya…
I suppose that’s sort-of what I mean.”
“Okay.
Then yes, I think we’re cowboys.” He forces a smile. “Tha’ okay wit’ you
part-ner?”
She
nods and returns to folding paper.
“Daddy?”
“Yes
sweetie.”
“Do
you think that Mommy can see us?”
“What?”
“Mommy.
I think she can. I think she’s watching us right now.”
A
mobile phone begins to ring underneath the giant white pillow at the head of
the bed.
“Don’t
worry,” she says. “I’ll get it.”
“No!”
he shouts and grabs for the phone. “No. It’s not for you. Okay, not for you.”
She
presses her head into the great white pillow. Scraps of paper have settled on
the bed, the floor, the windowsill. His ears are filled with silence.
“Sweetie,”
he says. “Sweetie, I’m sorry. I didn’t mean to snap. I just need to
concentrate. Sweetie?”
She
sits up and wipes her cheeks with the sleeves of her jumper.
“Maybe
they’re asleep?” she says, at last.
“You
think?”
“Ya,
I always get sleepy in the car. Maybe they’re just having a little nap?”
“I
dunno sweetie, it’s a funny place to fall asleep.”
“Not
really actually, Mommy was always falling asleep in the car. Wasn’t she?”
The
mobile phone, now on the floor beside his knees, starts to ring.
“For
Gods sake!” he shouts and throws the phone out the open window. The tiny
missile strikes the bonnet of the car closest to the house, and shatters into
four pieces. “Shite,” he says, peering after it. “Shite”
A
car door opens and a large man walks slowly to where the fragments of plastic
and metal have collected. He kneels to examine them, tossing pieces carelessly
here and there.
“Who
is that?” she whispers.
“That’s
the sheriff.”
“The
sheriff! But we’re the cowboys, shouldn’t the sheriff be on our side?”
“You
would think so, wouldn’t you,” he mutters.
“What?”
“No
sweetie, he’s not that sort of sheriff. He’s a bailiff.”
“I
don’t get it?”
“That’s
‘cause it’s complicated. He is a
sheriff, but he’s a different kind of sheriff from the ones in the Wild West.”
“Is
he like a bad sheriff then?”
“I
don’t know sweetie, maybe?”
“Hum,
I still don’t get it.”
“I
know,” he says. “I don’t really get it either.”
Four
men are standing in the front garden. A tall man in a black suit looks up
towards the bedroom window and shrugs.
“What’s
it going to be?” he says.
She
is crawling on the bed, stuffing small pieces of paper into her pockets.
“Why
don’t you lie down behind the bed?” he asks. “Like when we play hide and seek?”
His finger hovers over the trigger. “Pull the duvet down over your head. Go on
now.”
They
hear a knock on the front door.
“Daddy,
I’m scared Daddy. I don’t want the bad sheriff to come into our house.”
“Don’t
worry sweetie. I don’t want that either. Now you just get under the duvet. This
well all be over soon. Go on now.”
“Daddy?”
she says from underneath the duvet. “Do you think Mommy can see us?”
“I don’t know sweetie. I just don’t know.”
“I don’t know sweetie. I just don’t know.”
Oh, that's heartbreaking. Very tightly written, with great character detail and dialogue. Like the way you come at things sideways and don't spell it out. Makes it a lot more powerful. You really have talent.
ReplyDeleteThanks for the lovely comment Derbhile, I hope you don't mind but I've added World of Writing to my blog links section. Cheers Andy
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